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last story [Aug. 1st, 2004|10:46 pm]
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Hey everyone!
The last story i wrote i sent to all of you using each of your email addresses. That was before this AMAZING site started!!(thanx rosie!) So yeah, i got some responses from you guys, and i also sent it to my friend Joseph J. Mazella, who is also a writer. Joseph lives in, well, he lives in a different state, I can't remember which one right now, but i do remember he lives in the mountains!! I can't find his website right now, he's going to email it to me though. But yeah, back to what i was saying. I also sent that "9-11" story to Joe, and he wrote back saying this: "Ellen,Is this a true story? I didn't know of anyone on the planes that survived the crashes. If it is a work of fiction it is very powerful
and gripping. Still, it may be too soon after the attack to write a fictionalized account of it. You may get a lot of criticism for it.My only suggestions would be to space out the action more.The reader will need more places to catch his breath in all of this heart stopping action. I am sure you can do this easily in the editing process.I hope that you continue to write my friend. You have a lot of power and energy in your writing. It is quite good.Wishing you every joy, Joe"
Now the only thing i wonder about this, is what you think of this critiques? He is a talented man and writes mostly inspirational pieces, but talented all the same. I trust his judgment, but i would like to hear your thoughts on the matter as well. I look forward to a response to this horribly LONG posting, sorry!! Lataz!!

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[User Picture]From: amyace
2004-08-02 07:52 am (UTC)
i agree with your friend for the most part. if it's a story you want to expand on, you're going to have to do research, and really get the reader into the mindset of someone who's been through the event. it's a topic that hits home for very many people, and you bear lot of weight when you're taking on a story like that. i think it's a good idea, and something that could be presented very originally. people are used to hearing about september 11th, so if you really want to get the reader's attention, keep trying your hardest to bring new ideas to the table.

thanks for letting us read your stuff :)

xoxo,
amy
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